New World Coming – FFF38

For this weeks Flash Fiction Foray  Matt over at The Book Blogger very kindly used my music suggestion. Considering I had put it forward you would have thought I would have had a clue what to write, but no, it’s going to be as much of a surprise for me as it is for you.

If you would like to join in, clicking the link at the start of this paragraph will take you to this weeks challenge, or clicking HERE will take you to all the relevant information you require.  It’s only 100 little words :)

Here is my entry.

Music filled the forest as the mist crept ever closer, it’s cold fingers reaching from the sky to the very blades of grass beneath Polly’s feet.

‘I don’t like this’ said Teddy. ‘We’ll only go a little further.’

‘It has to be around here somewhere’ said an exasperated Polly.

And it was, it was just around the bend, a little door at the foot of an old and withering tree, with pebbles for a path.

‘Are you ready Teddy,  because once we go through, we can never come back?’

‘I’m ready, there’s a new world coming and it’s not good.’

 


I’d a couple of ideas for this one, I may or may not do another one. In the end though I chose my preferred characters, Polly and Teddy who I have had adventures with before. 

It’s not as easy as it first appears this malarky, but after much thought and editing as far as I know I came in right on the 100 words!

22 thoughts on “New World Coming – FFF38

  1. Oooh, I like this! So much going on in so few words – you even crammed in a twist ending (at least, an end I wasn’t expecting). I made a point of not reading anyone else’s response while I was crafting mine, and now I’m especially glad because this sets my wheels spinning down a whole ‘nother path.

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    • My other thought, which I won’t get doing now, was to have a young couple queuing for a fair ground ride. Same kinda idea, only the last line was once you get on you can never get off.
      I kinda like them cos they make you think. I need to do the other one I used to do too, Flash fiction for inspiring writers, it’s photo’s though and I seem to be able to daydream better to music lol

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  2. I thought it was great. Lots of meaning. After all, how many of us would grab the chance to run away if the world we knew was coming was a bad thing? There was a lot to think about in your piece. Nice job.
    Calen~

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