For this weeks Flash Fiction Foray Matt over at The Book Blogger very kindly used my music suggestion. Considering I had put it forward you would have thought I would have had a clue what to write, but no, it’s going to be as much of a surprise for me as it is for you.
If you would like to join in, clicking the link at the start of this paragraph will take you to this weeks challenge, or clicking HERE will take you to all the relevant information you require. It’s only 100 little words :)
Here is my entry.
Music filled the forest as the mist crept ever closer, it’s cold fingers reaching from the sky to the very blades of grass beneath Polly’s feet.
‘I don’t like this’ said Teddy. ‘We’ll only go a little further.’
‘It has to be around here somewhere’ said an exasperated Polly.
And it was, it was just around the bend, a little door at the foot of an old and withering tree, with pebbles for a path.
‘Are you ready Teddy, because once we go through, we can never come back?’
‘I’m ready, there’s a new world coming and it’s not good.’
I’d a couple of ideas for this one, I may or may not do another one. In the end though I chose my preferred characters, Polly and Teddy who I have had adventures with before.
It’s not as easy as it first appears this malarky, but after much thought and editing as far as I know I came in right on the 100 words!
The Indecisive Eejit 
Great take !! And I loved your song choice!!!
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Thank you, I’m going to head over and read your review of the books when I get a shower and coffee. I’m curious, the film was good, but not as good as I expected, so I think I’d like to give the books a try :)
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I read the books first… they totally drew me in. Found the film ok as a stand alone… but it wasn’t true to the book!!!!
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So (Bearing in mind I have not yet read your review) you would recommend them? lol
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Yeah I would!!!
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I always thought the best part was taking that 300-word story down to a mere hundred. Such craftsmanship. :)
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It’s a good brain workout. I always thought your Haiku’s were much harder, so much meaning in so few words!
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I still come up with haiku and I mean to post and then I never seem to get to do it.
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You should put some of you art on too :)
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I’ve been thinking about it… I need time to actually do it, between work and looking for a different job and everything else I’ve been nickel-and-diming my way through a few different pieces and I’m wondering if I couldn’t post some of my sketch pages with posts about my journey and my ten-year plan to become a freelance illustrator.
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That would be good. I love those ones as well where people film themselves drawing too.
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Yes I watch a lot of those, and I’m looking forward to a course that Artface will be releasing soon. Check out Mark Crilley too if you haven’t yet, he does pretty much all of his stuff on paper.
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Will do, ta :)
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Oooh, I like this! So much going on in so few words – you even crammed in a twist ending (at least, an end I wasn’t expecting). I made a point of not reading anyone else’s response while I was crafting mine, and now I’m especially glad because this sets my wheels spinning down a whole ‘nother path.
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My other thought, which I won’t get doing now, was to have a young couple queuing for a fair ground ride. Same kinda idea, only the last line was once you get on you can never get off.
I kinda like them cos they make you think. I need to do the other one I used to do too, Flash fiction for inspiring writers, it’s photo’s though and I seem to be able to daydream better to music lol
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The song is quite eerie and creepy (the start at least, anyway); you really caught that in your piece. Thanks for taking part!
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Lol it is, but you’re right about just at the start lol i had to keep replaying it to get the atmosphere I wanted :)
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[…] from The Indecisive Eejit – New World Coming – FFF38 – I felt a definite eerie and unnerving tone in the song, particularly at the start, which I […]
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I thought it was great. Lots of meaning. After all, how many of us would grab the chance to run away if the world we knew was coming was a bad thing? There was a lot to think about in your piece. Nice job.
Calen~
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Thanks. I’m enjoying these. I love how they make you think :)
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A lot of atmosphere, and the last line pulls the reader up short. A great job in 100 words – as you say, it isn’t easy!
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Thanks :) No it certainly gives the old wonky top box a good work out lol
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